请问,我写的这篇英文有语法错误吗?如果有请帮我改正,..

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请问,我写的这篇英文有语法错误吗?如果有请帮我改正,..
Having gazed at these willows,I was in tears sometime because I don't want to leave you.Having cherished that time when I worked and wandered in nature togather with you,I believed nothing can be more entertaining than it in the world.I laid in bed and kept coughing,it would be so great if you were here around me.Now I promise you to struggle together with you for the common ideal.

Having gazed at these willows,I was in tears sometime because I don't want to leave you.Having cherished that time when I worked and wandered in nature togather (together)with you,I believed nothing ...