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Red Cross Society of China is a unitary Red Cross organization of the People's * , a social relief and aid society that engages in humanitarian work. It is the largest charity in modern Chinese history. The organization always help those people , who require assistance , given hope and love to them .
But recently,The organization came under fire after a woman named Guo Meimei, who claims to be affiliated with the society, posted photos of her lavish lifestyle to her blog . People in online communities speculated that her extravagant purchases may have been funded by money embezzled from the RCSC. Although the organization has now made an attempt to publicize related information online, it is still being criticized for being confusing and unreliable. People were infuriated at the time and said money they had donated should have been used to help those in need.
So, I think the Charity system in China needs reform and supervision to regain public's trust and return to a healthy track, establish a transparent, fair and green charity mechanism.
Red Cross Society of China is a unitary Red Cross organization of the People's * ,【which is加上最好,句子显得更紧凑,更高档】 a social relief and aid society that engages in humanitarian work.It is the largest charity in modern Chinese history.The 【organization主语,单数】 always 【help——helps 单三式,与前面主语一致】 those 【people 可省去,those可以直接表人,做先行词】【,去掉】who require assistance 【and 加】【given——gives,与helps并列】 hope and love to them .
But 【recently现在完成时的时间状语】,the organization 【came ——has come】under fire after a woman named Guo Meimei,who 【claims——claimed】 to be affiliated with the society【and】posted photos of her lavish lifestyle to her blog .People in online communities speculated that her extravagant purchases may have been funded by money embezzled from the RCSC.Although the organization has now made an attempt to publicize related information online,it is still being criticized for being confusing and unreliable.People were infuriated at the time and said 【the后面有定语从句修饰,表特指】money they had donated should have been used to help those in need.
So,I think the Charity system in China needs reform and supervision to regain public's trust and 【make it】return to a healthy track【in order to】establish a transparent,fair and green charity mechanism.
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