帮改篇英语作文,高考标准,并且把错误指出,

帮改篇英语作文,高考标准,并且把错误指出,
以match winner loser result 为关键词写自己的经历和感受.
When I was a elementary student,so much younger than today,I actively attend a 400m match.In an effort to win this match,I bought new shoes and practise very hard.I spared no efforts in doing it and neglectd my core subjects.The sweats can powerfully prove my efforts and the action can give me power.I belive in it that :Practise makes perfect.Hard as I tried,I failed to win the match .I can't accept the reality in the first place.I wondered why I didn't win the game.Fortunately,my inner strength gradually weather the result and I didn't commit suicide..From my perspective,the result isn't so important and it is justified for us to enjoy the process.Sometimes be a loser maybe help us be a winner.
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