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帮我看看这篇作文吧,看看有没有什么语法错误,或者有什么地方可以改进的.
With the development of our society,we can see it obviously that phones gradually take the place of the letter in our daily life.Most of our generations even haven’t written a letter.
Everyday,we use mobile phones to communicate with people that are not on our sides.We send messages to others to give them our best wishes on festivals.We can even put pictures in our messages and let our friends know better how we are going on recently.It seems that the phone have made the world smaller and people closer.
However in my opinion,although phones bring us convenient,we always can’t get the true feelings that others want to show through the cold machine.Sometimes words are more powerful than language.And seeing the words that we have written down,others can know clearly what our inside feelings are or how much we miss them.