帮忙看看有没有什么语法错误一篇自我介绍Good afternoon everyone!My name is Eddy.I am fifteen years old this year.I have long black hair and black eyes.And I am wearing the glasses.I am one hundred and fifty-five certimeters tall.I like smiling,so I am a outgoing girl.I love outdoors' activities a lot,like swimming and running.请大家尽量“吹毛求疵”,帮我找出语法或逻辑错误,或者是有更好的句子可以代替原有的拙句.
帮忙看看有没有什么语法错误
一篇自我介绍
Good afternoon everyone!My name is Eddy.I am fifteen years old this year.I have long black hair and black eyes.And I am wearing the glasses.
I am one hundred and fifty-five certimeters tall.I like smiling,so I am a outgoing girl.I love outdoors' activities a lot,like swimming and running.
请大家尽量“吹毛求疵”,帮我找出语法或逻辑错误,或者是有更好的句子可以代替原有的拙句.
an outgoing
最后一行like 去掉
建议不要总以I 开头 稍稍换换句型
修改后的文章：Good afternoon everyone!My name is Eddy,a fifteen-year-old girl with long black hair and black eyes.I am one hundred and fifty-five certimeters tall and wear glasses.I am an outgoing gir...
I am fifteen years old this year.
要么就是I'll be fifteen years old this year要么就是I'm fifteen years old.
outdoors' activities改成outdoor activities.