这10个句子的语法都哪里错了?

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这10个句子的语法都哪里错了?
11.When her two-year-yld son doesn’t get his way,he has a fit.For example,lying on the floor screaming.
12.Grieving over a loss—like death or divorce—is a process involving many stages.Denial,anger,guilt,negotiation,and,finally,acceptance.
13.Although my spoken French is not good.I can read the language fairly well.
14.December’s winter storms have forced the city to acknowledge that is it not truly prepared for even a minor disaster,no one who lives in Portland would disagree with this statement.
15.Last week my sister Susan called and tells me that her step-daughter was arrested.
16.Brandon himself earns very little money,however,his father is quite wealthy.
17.In todays Oregonian it states that the crisis in the Middle East is getting even worse.
18.The bank robber was described as being about six feet tall with a thick mustache weighing about 150 pounds.
19.Recently,they cut ten days from the school calendar in order to balance next years budget.
20.After school activities during the week include museum tours,music lessons,and computers.

11. When her two-year-yld son doesn’t get his way, he has a fit【.】For example, lying on the floor screaming. 改成【; 】两个句子之间有逻辑关系... 如果这是分开的两个句子那么用. 但是在这里 for exmaple说的事前面的fit...
12. Grieving over a loss—like death or divorce—is a process involving many stages【.】Denial, anger, guilt, negotiation, and, finally, acceptance. 可以改成 【——】或者【such as】之类的连接... 原因同上 后面这些没有前面的东西无法独立存在

13. Although my spoken French is not good【.】I can read the language fairly well. 改成【,】Although 是连词 连接两个完整的句子所以不能用.把两个句子拆开
14. December’s winter storms have forced the city to acknowledge that 【is it】 not truly prepared for even a minor disaster, no one who lives in Portland would disagree with this statement. 我不知道这是不是打错了... 应改成【it is】
15. Last week my sister Susan called and 【tells】 me that her step-daughter was arrested. 【told】前面called是过去式 这里应当跟前面一致
16. Brandon himself earns very little money【,】 however, his father is quite wealthy.【;】however不是连词 不能连接两个完整的句子
17. 【In todays Oregonian it】 states that the crisis in the Middle East is getting even worse. 【today, Oregonian】 就好比你不能说 在今天的会议上,它这个【它】是谁?
18. The bank robber was described as being about six feet tall with a thick mustache【 weighing about 150 pounds】. 这部分放到前面 因为放在这里就好像在说 thick mustache weigh 150 pound
19. Recently, they 【】 cut ten days from the school calendar in order to balance next years budget. 【have】前面有说最近 所有有个到今天为止的时间段 用现完
20. After school activities during the week include museum tours, music lessons, and computers【】.【lesson etc】 computer不是一种activity... 所以改成computer lesson之类的activity就行了.