帮我看下我写的英语,纠正下我的错误,我英语很差,

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帮我看下我写的英语,纠正下我的错误,我英语很差,
when i leave you every time
and i don't know what do you feel
but i miss you every night
and you don't know what i think about
when i lost you every time
It's a strange feeling
i don't have to say
say
many people all around the world
Why did it have you found me
I fell in love with you(让我爱上了你)
So i must learn to treasure(珍惜)
many people all around the world
Why is that you fill my heart
Makes me feel complete
So i must learn to treasure(珍惜)
hey snow
don't be angry with me
you now
Do anything for you
lala
I give you a nickname
Sweetheart
all always call you like this
so i need you every day
I hope we are together forever
So I do not want you cry every night
cause I always by your side
well together

and you don't know what i think about》+上that(文法问题)
It'sa strange feeling》+but(会顺口一点)
i don't have to say
Why did it have you found me》why did you find me(文法不对+did后面动词不会是过去式)
hey snow 》snow是雪的意思,应该转成my love或者honey
all alwayscall you like this》all always +I(文法错误)
I hope we are together forever》are》will(hope是未来的,所以用future tense)
So I do not want you cry every night》do not 变成don‘t
cause I always by your side》cause是因为》什么叫做所以我不想你每天晚上哭,因为我一直在你身边,不合符逻辑,所以cause换成and