请大家帮我修改一下这篇英语作文(初三水平)
请大家帮我修改一下这篇英语作文(初三水平)
An Unforgettable Help
I'll finish my study in junior middle school soon.【(接下来是我写的)But every time when I think of a girl,my heart will filled with pleasure①
Once I took a Chinese exam.Unluckily,I failed it .It's my first time to fail a exam,so I was very guilty and worried.And I was in a bad mood while I was in class③.Suddenly,somebody② came to me,she asked me why I was so unhappy.I told her.Then she said:"Come on girl!There are still something else you did very well!Look at the great results in your English and Math!" she talked to me for a long time ,then I felt better. ⑥】
(接下来是作文给出的已有句子)Thanks for your help,my best friend .I will never forget our friendship!
问题
①(需要复数吗).
②(用someone可以吗?感觉不顺口)
③是不是有点啰嗦(麻烦修改)
⑥觉得这句怪怪的
2.修改一些错误(包括拼写)
3.最后的句子衔接的突兀,但【】里的内容有字数限制(60~80词..我已经超到100词了..),写一下你的修改?~
请在初中水平里修改.谢谢!O(∩_∩)O
不用复数,但filled 前面应该加be
It's my first time that failed an exam.
Suddenly,a girl came to me and asked me ...
There is still something else
超过十个、二十个单词没有关系的