一个英语作文,有没有语法错误
问题描述：
一个英语作文,有没有语法错误
Yesterday,my mother took me to buy a skateboard,home mom let me go to the square to practice.I put the right foot on the slide,slide to slide,slide always refuses to write,mom came up to me and said:"the first forefoot balance,jitter and the slide stop." Listen to the mother's words,I began to learn slowly,finally two days later I learned,while practicing the slide is very tired,but I am very happy.
答
你这完全是中式英语,语法错误太多了.帮忙改改啊建议你不要侧重于描写学溜冰的过程（这实在不好写，你写的也完全是拼出来的），而是可以加些别的内容。比如，我在广场上还遇到了什么有趣的人或事，还玩了什么，吃了什么，遇到了什么朋友，总之，是玩得如何如何开心。你改一下方向，可能会好写些。