请高手帮忙改改我英语作文中的错误,

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请高手帮忙改改我英语作文中的错误,
If I were a boy
I wish I were a boy!
I still remembered that when I was a child,my parents ofter said to me “How I wish you were a boy.” Because if I were a boy,my father would not have lost his job,my family would be a good family.
Were I a boy,I would try my best to learn knowledge as much as possible.Because in order to support the family,parents try their best to work hard.I want to let them live a happy life.
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If only I were a boy!
If I were a boy,I would help the girls who need help.
If I were a boy,I would take good care of my love and protect she.
If I were a boy,I would take good care of my parents and my little sister/ brother.
If I were a boy,I would…
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Today,I would rather I had a job.
If I had a job now,I would make much money.However,I am studying in the college.To be frank,I would rather I had a job.Because I think if were at work,I also can get much experience and knowledge.I think it will be make me more wonderful.To be the truth,I am very regret to study here.If I had not choose to study here,I think I would be happy now.In addition,If I were rich,I would buy a house for my parents.I want to live a life of ease and make people around me have a good life.In all,I will try my best exertions to study and I can find a good job.

If I were a boy
I wish I were a boy!
I still remembered that when I was a child,my parents ofter(一般后面加现在时,used to) said to me “How I wish you were a boy.” Because if I were a boy,my father would not have lost his job,my family would be a good family.
(If I was,将were I删去)Were I a boy,I would(缩写成I’d会更好) try my best(也可用I’ll spare no effort) to learn knowledge as much as possible.Because in order to(删去in order to,I want/hope)to support the family,parents try(不是过去时吗,tried) their best to work hard.(好像不符语意吧,parents worked so hard that they were too exhausted to enjoy their life and)I want to let them live a happy life.
1
If only I were a boy!
If I were a boy,I would help the girls who need help.
If I were a boy,I would take good care of my love(lover) and protect she(her).
If I were a boy,I would take good care of my parents and my little sister/ brother.
If I were a boy,I would…
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Today,I would rather I had a job.
If I had a job now,I would make much(a lot of) money.However,I am studying in the college.To be frank,I would rather I had a job.Because I think if(I) were at work,I also can get much experience and knowledge.I think it will be make me more wonderful.To be the truth,I am very regret to study here.If I had not choose(if I didn’t make a choice)to study here,I think I would be happy now.In addition,If I were rich,I would buy a house for(to,此为固定搭配!) my parents.I want to live a life of ease(want to后面改为live a easy life) and make(let) people around me have a good life.In all,I will try my best exertions(好累赘~删去吧) to study and I can(will比较符合语法规则) find a good job.