请高手修改并评价一下这篇4级英语作文

请高手修改并评价一下这篇4级英语作文
For this part,you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay entitled What Electives to Choose.You should write at least 120 words following the outline given below.
1各大学为学生开设了多种多样的选修课
2学生出于各种原因选择不同的选修课
3以我自己为例.
What Electives to Choose
As is known to us all,university is a place where we can enrich our life and acquire knowledge from a wide range of subjects.Apart from one's major,one can choose various electives.There's a growing concern over the matter among the public.
Undergraduates choose different electives due to some particular reasons,simple but thought-provoking.In the first place,one's interest is the foremost factor for choosing an elective.Only if one prefers his elective can he concentrate on the elective and try to learn it well.In addition,according to my personal experiences,I reckon that the teacher of the elective also plays an important role.On condition that the teacher is experienced and well qualified,students are more liable to take the teacher into consideration.Last but no the least,time is an essential factor.Undoubtedly,the electives one choose shouldn't be at the same time with other subjects.
In dealing with this problem,I'd like to choose an elective in which I take an interest.I believe that the more you like it,the more you can do it well.Surely,some other factors such as time,teachers should be considered as well.Now,it's high time we chose an elective,let's go!