请各位英语高手帮我看一下这篇文章的语法错误,并指出以便改正My dream jobI'm going to be a doctor in the future,just like my mom and dad.I think doctor is a great job,doctor can save many people's life.I want to be this person.If Iwant to ba a good doctor,firstly,I musy learn harder in shcool.Secondly,I should keep fit,because I think a docotor want to make patiens to be healthy,he should have a good body.But I think these are not enough.So,I'll learn about illness.For exampel:When

Life的复数 是 lives.
我想做这样的人是：i want to be people like that.
musy 写错 must
hard 就可以了,或者用 more hard,harder 不对.
because I think 改成 if
have a good body 是中国的表达方式,应该改成：keep fit.
感冒是 catch a cold.吃药用 take 不用 eat
how to ,how 写错了
like eat much more vegetables 不用like ,用 such as 或 for example
those 改成 that
beside是旁边的意思,身边的人应该用 everybody around me
好可爱的小盆友啊,加油,写的不错
再给你补一篇好一些的,你拿去看一看,
My Dream Job
I want to be a doctor when I grow up,just like Mom and Dad.
In my opinion,doctor is a great job,because doctor can save many people's lives.I want to be people like that.
To be a good doctor,I must study hard at shcool firstly.Secondly,I should keep fit；I think a docotor who want to make his patiens healthy should be healthy of himself.But these are still not enough.
I should learn about illness,too.For exampel,When I catch a cold,what medicine should I take?Further,I 'll go to hospital to learn about looking after patients.What's more,I'm planing going to learn hou to keep fit,such as eating much more vegetables etc,and tell it to my parents and friends.
If I know that,I would be able to take care of my friends and my parents.Everybody around me will be healthy.
I hope illness will disappear in the world,everybody will be healthy and happy everyday!