帮忙看看这里面有没有语法错误,

帮忙看看这里面有没有语法错误,
Insist on our aims
The passage tells us a wild duck,who is called Wally,didn’t insist on the journey.The reason is that he saw a flock of ducks on the ground eating corn and he dived to the yard.Finally,he become a yard duck.
After reading the story,I am lost in deeply thoughts.There are many people similar with Wally.When they are try to do something,if he or she get into difficulties,they often chose give up their aims.So their results like Wally,they still a ordinary people even more badly.
If I am Wally,when the first attempt failed,I think I will try again.Untill I succseed.Because,only in this way,I can be successful
In my opinion,it is necessary for us persist in our aims.And then we likely become a successful man