Many people rush into city,with (that) only part of them may get job.这句话有什么问题...

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Many people rush into city,with (that) only part of them may get job.这句话有什么问题...
Many people rush into city,with (that) only part of them may get job.
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太多的人涌入城市,只有一小部分可能找到工作.
应该加个转折连词but
Many people rush into city,but only part of them can get jobs