My composition,Who can help me correct the mistake?My name is liuxing who is a new student in Grade One from XinHua higher school.Todan is my first day at senior high,I am glad to study here.The teachers are enthusiastic and the students are very friendly.There are severals sujects in our school,such as Chinese,physics,biology and so on.Besketball,drama andcomputerare the school's most popular extracurricular acitivits想睡觉了，边打边睡，造成严重后果My name is liuxin
My composition,Who can help me correct the mistake?
My name is liuxing who is a new student in Grade One from XinHua higher school.Todan is my first day at senior high,I am glad to study here.The teachers are enthusiastic and the students are very friendly.There are severals sujects in our school,such as Chinese,physics,biology and so on.Besketball,drama and
computerare the school's most popular extracurricular acitivits
想睡觉了，边打边睡，造成严重后果
My name is liuxing who is a new student in Grade One from XinHua higher .Today is my first day at senior high,I am glad to study here.The teachers are enthusiastic and the students are very friendly.There are several sujects in our school,such as Chinese,physics,biology and so on.Basketball,drama and
computer are the school's most popular extracurricular acitivits(课外活动）。
我也不想罗里罗嗦，这篇是任务型作文，只能用5个句子。其中，还要注重复合句的运用。
1. My name is ...后面跟who感觉有点别扭，前面可以说I am liuxing who或者最好就分开：My name is liuxing. I am a ... 不要觉得这样没水平，其实有时候长句子多了也不好。
2. higher school：不知道你要表达什么，高中吗？前面有XinHua这个名词的话后面直接跟middle school就好了，也不用改成high school，那成高校了。
3. Today拼错了
4. at senior high...不知道是不是我的语言落伍了。。。这样用可以吗？我觉得不是口语而是书面语的话还是说senior middle school号。
5. several 和 subjects 拼错了
6. Basketball拼错了
7. computer are 分开
8. activities拼错了
还有你的问题：应该是mistakes
注：你词汇量还挺不错，加油~天津新华吗？老乡啊~
我重新为你写吧:
My name is Liu Xing. I am a new student in Senior Grade One of XinHua High School. Today is my first day at this school. I am very glad to study here. Teachers here are enthusiastic and students here are very friendly. We will have severals subjects this year, such as Chinese, Physics, Biology and so on. Basketball, Drama Show and Computer Applications are the most popular after-school activities at this school.
My name is liuxing. I am a new student in Senior(Grade) One of XinHua middle (or high school if u want to) school. Today is my first day to study in this school, and I am quite glad to be here. It really means a lot to me. The teachers here are quite nice, (enthusiastic) and the students are all friendly to me. There are many(you cant use several here) sujects in our school,such as Chinese, English, Physics, Biology and so on. There are a lot of extracurricular acitivits in our school. The most popular ones i find, are the basketball, the drama and the computer.
ps
the word extracurricular acitivits is a typically english word. it is a v.good word, where did u find it?
My name is liuxing. I am a new student in Senior(Grade) One of XinHua middle (or high school if u want to) school, which as i know, is the best college in this city! The teachers here are quite nice, (enthusiastic) and the students are all friendly to me. There are a lot of extracurricular acitivits in our school. The most popular ones i find, are the basketball, the drama and the computer.
high school就可以了,不用higher
today拼错了
several后面不用s,several subjects
basketball也拼错了
computterare?不知道你要表达什么意思
最后一句缺少谓语
My name is LiuXing who is a new Grade one student in XinHua High School.Today is my first day in the new school,(因为先前已经说了学校名,所以这里就不用重复了)i am glad to study in this high school and i feel excited.I find that the teachers are enthusiastic and people around me are friendly.(这里就用周围人来代表)There are more subjects in High School as compare to Secondary School,(在高中里的科目和中学比起来多了很多)such as Biology,Physics,English and so on.Basketball,Drama Club and Computer Club(club指社团)are the most popular co-curricular activities(我学校就用这个,co就是指附带的.不过我想和那个extra...的差不多).
要相信我哦~保证对!