求高人修改专四作文

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求高人修改专四作文
A Pollution Tax
Currently,government agencies consider levying environmental taxes on private car owners an effective way to protect environment,which has aroused a heated discussion among the public.With reference to my standpoint,private car owners should be taxed for pollution.
To begin with,it is not far for private car owners.No one can deny the fact that many public vehicles are not environmental friendly.If pollution taxes are only levied on private car owners,unfairness may about.Even worse,social harmony may be destroyed.
Besides,it is clear that private car owners' economic burden will be increased.Because of a pollution tax,As we all know,the price of oil is on the rise,which has already been a headache for private car owners.In that case,extra taxes like a pollution tax may freak them out and increase their financial burden.
Taking the three factors into account,I don't think it a good measure to private car owners foe pollution.What's more,government agencies should take action to develop new energy to cut down car pollution.
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呵呵,这就不必了~~参考范文我也有很多的,总之谢谢你把刚才那提的回答粘贴过来吧,要不然采纳说不过去。。It is not far=>it is not fair Unfairness may about 是想表达什么意思?建议修改 第二段besides可以用高级一些的词来代替,如furthermore,moreover 最后一段你说有三个stand point,为什么我只看到两个?measure是测量的意思,你这是想说method吗?还有后面的foe=>for,to后少个动词 就考试而言,这篇文章已经够了,但在我个人看来,这篇文章的逻辑缺乏联系,如果你想让你的写作再上一个层次,请考虑用一些例子来支持你的观点 ,并运用适当承接、总结语增强逻辑