求大神,帮忙改一下这篇文章的语法! 感激不尽

求大神,帮忙改一下这篇文章的语法! 感激不尽
Some people claim that parents should not let children make mistakes and
then learn from them. This argument seems reasonable. For example, my cousin is
studying in the Tsinghua University and the way my aunt used to educate him was
take care of everything for him excepted for learning, so he nearly made any
mistakes that made him a really confident student which was one of the mainly
reason he could enter the Tsinghua University.
First,
children can live with less pressure if their parents do not let them make
mistakes and then learn something from them. This is because parents who try to
help their children avoiding mistakes and troubles can provide more peaceful and
happier environment for their kids to grow up and have an enjoyable and less
pressure childhood.
Second,
parents who do not let children make mistakes can improve their children’s
studying efficiency. As I mention in the first paragraph, my aunt take care of
all the stuffs for my cousin, such as clothing, transportation, tuition fee,
etc. Therefore my cousin will not worry about those things and is able to only
focus on studying.
However,
although, parents who do not let their children make mistakes and learn from their
mistakes can protect their children from pressure, this kind of behave can also
make their children become vulnerable. Therefore, when they grow up, and have
to face the troubles by themselves they may do not know what to do and get
overwhelming, once they make mistakes maybe even a small mistake can let them
loss confidence and then give up.
Furthermore,
this kind of opinion might help the children to increase their studying
efficiency but it is only for the textbook knowledge, they miss dozen of
chances to practice their social skill, communication skill, and organization
skill, parents who take care of all the businesses for their kids will force
them become what people call “pedant”, so it is fair to say this opinion hurts
their children and make them learn nothing.
In contrast, parents who let their children
make mistake and learn from the mistake can help the children become more
independent. This is mean when children make mistakes, their parents will not
help them, and they have to fix them by themselves. For example, when I was a
little boy my father intentionally let me go to some places by bus or subway
alone, so I need to found the right bus or subway and bought tickets all by
myself, which helped me improving my social skill, communication skill andsearching skill, those are all major factor to help me become independent.