看看这篇英文短文中有没有什么语法错误~

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看看这篇英文短文中有没有什么语法错误~
这是翻译之前的:
1.接下来是才艺展示,但是我想用这次难得的机会来表示对初中生活的怀念,就是这样简单,没有伴奏,没有舞蹈.一首《Hurt》送给大家.
2.事实上,我还想感谢我的老朋友,她是个有梦想的女孩,但是她的追梦历程并不简单,我很想帮助她,但是我也无能为力,就好像是这首《nobodys home》.
3.我怀念之前的生活,也热爱现在的同学和老师.不管发生什么,我和所有同学的心都会在一起并永恒,最后一首歌献给所有人《my heart will go on》
翻译之后的:
1、Next is talent show .I want to take this god-given opportunity to cherish the memory of my middle school life .It is as simple as that,no accompaniment,no dance.A hurt to everybody.
2、In fact ,I would also like to thank my old friend.She is a dreaming girl ,but her endeavor course is not easy .I ' d like to help her ,but I ' m incapable of action,just like this song .
3、I cherish the memory of previous life ,also have deep love for present classmates and teachers.No matter what happens ,all students' heart ,including me ,will always be together and forever .The last song to everyone.

可能如下面作些修改好一些:
1、Nextisthe talentshow . Iwanttotakethisgod-givenopportunitytocherishthememoryofthelife inourmiddleschool. It is just as simple as follows, no accompaniment, no dancing . onlya hurttoeverybody.
2、Infact , Iwouldalsoliketothankmyoldfriend.Sheisadreaminggirl , butherendeavor course isnoteasy .I ' dliketohelpher ,butI ' mincapable of action,just asthesong : .tells us .
3、I cherishthememoryofprevious life , I alsohavedeeploveforpresentclassmatesandteachers.Nomatterwhathappens , allstudents'heartS,includingme , willalwaysbetogetherandforever . Finally, I’LL sing asong foreveryone. to end the party .好感谢~\(≧▽≦)/~啦啦啦~,虽然不确定对不对