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求大神帮忙改雅思小作文啊,剑8Task
The line graph below demonstrate how many goods transported
by four different types of ways in the UK between 1974 and 2002.
In 1974,road transportation was the most popular way to
deliver goods,on average 70 million tonnes,followed by water and rail,with
about 40 million tonnes equal,and approximately 5 million tonnes transported
by pipeline.
According to the graph,there was a increased trend of
quantities of goods transported by water,from 40 million tonnes to about 60
million tonnes,between 1978 to 2002,while the goods transported by rail
decreased by 15 million tonnes,to the lowest point,from 40 million tonnes to
25 tonnes,eventually,back to the original quantities.Although,there was a
fluctuation of goods transported were both climbed by 20 million tonnes,from
1974 to 2002.
Overall,the information given by the line graph is about
the increased tendency of all the modes of transport for delivering goods.
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