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Questions：
It is generally acknowledged that familiesare now not as close as they used to be.What are the possible reasons for thisand what can be done to reserve the trend.
Family relationship plays a verysignificant part in our social life.Close family will have positive effectiveson only on family members but also on the social stability.However,with thedevelopment of modern society,the families are not close as before anymore.Thisessay will present several reasons and make some suggestions.
There are three reasons about thisphenomenon.Firstly,many young people trend to work or study in the largecities,which make the geographical distance between parents and children,which cause serious communication problems between family members.Secondly,with the development of Internet technology,young people like communicate withfriends on the Internet or using message while their parents prefer face toface interaction.Last but not least,the increase of social pressure,which causespeople concern more about interest,has negative effect on the relationship betweenfamily members.
As far as I am concern,some actions couldbe done to improve this situation.For young people,they should understand andcare more about their parents and try to go back home more often rather thansurf the Internet.For their parents,it is a good idea that using Internetcamera tools to communicate and understand their habits which can help tonarrow the generation gap.
Thisessay points out some reasons of that situation and makes some suggestions.Althoughthere are some difficulties when take the real action,all families memberstake positive attitude to face this gap and make some real action,this trendwill be reserved eventually.