睡能帮我改改这篇关于上海的英语短文啊```!急用``!
睡能帮我改改这篇关于上海的英语短文啊```!急用``!
My faverite citi is shanghai.
Shanghai is a big city .And it's east.Shanghai is a very beautiful city .There are so many park and garden in it.And there are also many place of intrest in shanghai.For exanple,the bund,the Jinmso building,the Science and Technology Museam and the famous building --- Oriental Pearl TV Tower.
And I know ,many many writer are from shanghai.Like Han han ,Rao xue man ...My dream is be a writer .So I like shanghai very much!And you?
There are so many park and garden in it
这句park 和garden要用复数
And there are also many place of intrest in shanghai
里面place要用复数
For exanple,the bund,the Jinmso building,the Science and Technology Museam and the famous building --- Oriental Pearl TV Tower.
不用For exanple,改为such as 表示列举 也是例如
My dream is be a writer
应改为：My dream will be a writer.
你看对吗?