看到错就帮忙改一下拉,最好说明了

good morning,everyone.my name is .I'm glad to be here introducing myself.I'm a 14-year-old girl.As it is the age with energy,I have many hobbies,such as swimming,listening to the pop music and tennis( 最好用3个爱好,要不然说服力不够,我给你加了一个打网球你可以改的）and they make my life with full of passion and excitments.Also it makes me a outgoing and easygoing girl.Thanks!
给你改了一些 excitments ：带有激情的事情 passion:活力 energy:活力的另外一种说法 tennis：网球