请大哥哥大姐姐指导下英语作文.

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请大哥哥大姐姐指导下英语作文.
Impression of after-reading---
A girl,at the age of 15,was infected with a terrible disease.At first,her mother was afraid of telling her truth that this kind of disease didn’t have any medicine to help,meaning it could not cure.From day to day,the girl’s body began to lose balance,and then she even could not walk any more.Gradually,she realized the truth.Whereas,instead of giving up,she began to keep a diary to write down her thinking,she insisted on doing it everyday.
In her diary,she wrote down the battle against the disease during the past decade.She was aware of living is beautiful,what is more,her courage and confidence moved many patients who had the same disease with her.
Despite all the efforts from her doctor,her parents and herself in the battle against the disease,the serious illness swallowed her body gradually.At last,she could not move and only can stay at the wheelchair.
A disaster makes us brave.I have learned how to face reality instead of escaping from it.In our lives,no matter how terrible a problem is,we have to face.Remembering of her courage and confidence makes my body excited.Especially her diary moved me deeply from which I see an optimistic girl.I believe as long as you strengthen your dream,it will come true eventually.
哪些句子可以写得再好一点,英语作文怎么才写得让人欣赏啊,考英语4级作文有点难度啊,

A reflective response to “A Diary with Tears”
A girl,at the age of 15,was infected with a terrible disease.At first,her mother was reluctant to tell her the truth that there wasn’t any medicine for this kind of disease,which meant it was incurable.As time passed by,the girl’s body began to lose balance,and eventually the ability to walk.She finally came to realize the truth.Instead of giving up,she began to write down her thoughts in a diary; she insisted on doing it everyday.In her diary,she described the battles against the disease over a course of a decade.She found that life was beautiful; moreover,her courage and confidence also moved many patients who were afflicted with the same disease.
Despite all the efforts made by her doctor,who joined her and her parents in the battle against the disease,the debilitating illness made her become immobile and entirely wheelchair-bound.
Misfortunes make people brave.I have learnt to face reality instead of trying to escape from it.In our life,no matter how terrible a problem is,we have to face it.Thinking of her courage and confidence makes me exhilarated.I am especially touched by her diary,in which I see an optimistic girl.I believe as long as our dream remains alive,it will come true eventually.