求英语高手来指出作文中的错误

求英语高手来指出作文中的错误
Many student are inclined to talk with their penfriends.They seldom take care of their parents.In their opinion,their parents always don't like them to do this or that.They believe that only their penfriens can understand them.But l think it is wrong.l suggest that students should spend more time with their parents and friends.
First of all,we should talk about our daily life with our parents to share our happiness.Next,when parents look worried,we should ask them what we can do to help them.Parents will be happy to hear this.After that,when the weather is changable,we should suggest them to wear more clothes or less.Finally,when you make a decision,you can ask them for advice.They must be happy to help you.
Of course,when your friend is in trouble,you should give him a hand.For a man who is worried,it is very important.
In a short,Let's take more care for others.The love we give away is the only love we keep.
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