求改托福作文一篇,评个分

求改托福作文一篇,评个分
What changes will the 21st century bring?People seldom agree with each others on such subjective question that hardly can we find an optimal perspective to convince all.Some people believe it is fresh views or new elements of ideology will play a key role in the new century,for the assimilate effects of globalization.However,some people maintain that the changes in environment will be most notable,since we have damage our circumstance so much,and gradually,people realizes the importance of environment.This opinion just coincide with that of mine.
Life without good environment just likes the Garden of Eden without glorious flower.People can easily produce machine to simplify our lives,but hardly to make our earth became what it was.The problem we are facing is that our quality of lives is declined,and we have to do something with it.Currently,we see,Cars is making poisons for flowers and fosters while factories is producing killers to birds and fishes.Never can we deny the effects that our environment was devastated.Every vacation,my family has to go to mountain,if we want to see stars and breath normal air.Thanks to God,people realize the result of our problematic development,and is undergoing the relative works.
Another reason is that the outcomes of the “non-environmental friendly” development not only concern the surroundings of daily life,but also jeopardize the really life itself of people.Such as the old and the young,the most vulnerable part.Resisting harmful emissions isn't a easy task for their body.After all,it’s bad for normal people as well.On the other hand,some strange diseases,as the result of that,appear much more frequently than ever since.Ergo,do a change in environment isn't some can be waited,but something emergent!
As mentioned above,environment,in my view,is most likely to be brought in this new century.I believe that environment should be something of people,by people,and for people,and I believe that the change will come soon.