能帮我看一下这份英文自我介绍还可以吗?

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能帮我看一下这份英文自我介绍还可以吗?
Good afternoon.It is really a great honor to have the opportunity for this interview.My name is ***.I’m a sophomore major in English at *** University.With tremendous interest in English interpretation,I sent application to your company.
I have a habit of making plans so that I can manage my time effectively.Last summer holiday,I got my first internship as an assistant; Last December,I managed to be the Expo volunteer.And now,I’m striving to be a member of your team.I am a person with stable personality and high sense of responsibility.I fear no risks and never confused by any interference because I am bright and dedicated.Although I am a freshman in the field of interpretation,I am aggressive to learn and progress.
I’m the leader of English corner at college.I want to help more friends get interested in English.Vocabulary can be accumulated; the sense of language can be cultivated.My English is not 100% fluent,but I ‘m improving and that is what every outstanding interpreter has experienced.
Given a chance to work for your company,I will try my best to make contributions and prove that your investment is a smart choice.
Thank you very much for your attention!

tremendous 是大的惊人的意思 也有可怕的意思 换一个吧I sent application to your company太绕了 直接apply for the job就好了I’m striving to be a member of your team.I am a person with stable personality a...