逐句分析的追加5-10分,求帮修改作文,写错语法错误需要改正的地方,15分满分能打几分?.准备考四级的

逐句分析的追加5-10分,求帮修改作文,写错语法错误需要改正的地方,15分满分能打几分?.准备考四级的
telephone or letter
with the developing of technology ,telephone has been used all over the world.when asked which is the best way to contact with others,telephone or letter?different people have different answers.most people choose the former while others choose the later.
the people who hold the first opinion believe that contacting by telephone is more convenience than by letter.especially the mobile phone,you can contact with others by is whenever and wherever you want.however ,others who choose the later opinion may think that it can save much money on contacting by letter than by telephone.and,some people are shy to express their mind to others by the directing way ,such as telephone.for example ,as girls,they usually shy to show their love to boys face to face and by telephone.most of them prefer to show their love by the letter.
in my eyes,the two choices have their own advantages.whichever choice one makes,he has his own reasons.after weighting up these two choices,i think i will contant with others by telephone in most time,but sometime i will choose the letter too.