逐句分析的追加5-10分,求帮修改作文,写错语法错误需要改正的地方,15分满分能打几分?麻烦.考四级

逐句分析的追加5-10分,求帮修改作文,写错语法错误需要改正的地方,15分满分能打几分?麻烦.考四级
big city or small town
nowdays,many graduates choose to work in big city .they may think that it is easier than small town to find a suitable job in big city.there are more working chances in big city and the level of salary is higher than small town.they are eager to learn more knowledge and to earn more money.
however,some graduates prefer to start their work in small town.in their eyes,the price of commodicies is much lower than big city.to the person who just graduate from college,it is suiable for them to work.
peasonally,i will stay at big city.after graduation.for one things,big city can provide more chances for me to work,especially the jobs that i like to.for another,there are more knowledge waitting for me to learn.the big city also can provide more chances for me to improve myself.