帮我看一下我的这篇英语短文有没有什么严重的语法错误?快

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帮我看一下我的这篇英语短文有没有什么严重的语法错误?快
Jerry is flying a kite in the park.He was very happy.But now he is surprised.Because the kite line is borken.He can not get.His classmate Mary come say:"I can help you with your to it." Mary stretched her hands.But Mary fell into the water.Jerry is very happy.有没有语法错?比如过去式,现在进行时?我已经混乱啦!明天就要脱稿的!

is flying 和He was very happy 冲突 Mary come say:"I can help you with your to it." 没这种come 和say放一起的用法,缺少连接词 Mary stretched her hands.But Mary fell into the water.Jerry is very happy.前面一句用现在时,后面用过去式?再接现在时?而且全文一看就是中式英语.