帮我看一下这句话的语法 Don't focus on yourself,focus on your dream

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帮我看一下这句话的语法 Don't focus on yourself,focus on your dream
Don't focus on you,but your plan,your dream,your world.这样可以吗

Don't focus on yourself,focus on your dream这句没啥问题
补充的那句也可以