跪求雅思a类大作文修改及评分!

跪求雅思a类大作文修改及评分!
some people think that,in order to improve the quality of education,students should be encouraged to evaluate and criticize their teachers.others feel that this will result in a loss of respect and discipline in the classroom.dicuss both sides and give your opinion.
These days,public debate has been going on in my country over whether students should be inspired to evaluate and point out the mistakes that they think their teachers may have made.I intend to present my ideas about the pros and cons of it.
As for the students studying in rural areas in my country,their teachers are not well-experienced,and well-bred.Therefore,inevitably,they may impose corporal punishment to their students when they are moderately offended or when their students do not obey school rules.If they were informed that it is appropriate to notify their teachers the invalidity of carrying out physical abuse to youngsters,then this kind of situation would not occur.
In comparison with those who studies in poor areas,students in cities,undoubtedly,are given much more decent schooling.However,there is still need to encourage them to evaluate their teachers.For instance,it can promote the communication between students and teachers.As far as I am concerned,teaching refers to the exchange of a great amount of knowledge and different personal opinions.If this process only involved teachers’ output,but no feedback from students,then it could not be described as effective ‘work’.Furthermore,once teachers receive the comments from students,they are more likely to accept the beneficial ones rather than just completely neglecting them.This will exert a positive impact on the improvement of teaching methods and more importantly,the establishment of friendship between them.
On the other hand,this practice could possibly give rise to poor discipline in the classroom,as some naught boys might put forward unjustified suggestions in order to accomplish the purpose of creating tension.Not only would this have adverse effects on teaching,but it would also partly destroy the faith that teachers have in their students.
Overall,my view is that we should support this suggestion on the grounds that it enables teachers to have good awareness of students’ main interests,which enormously helps them have good control of the class.At the meantime,I am quite convinced that students will find their class absorbing.