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Recreational Activities
Nowadays,different kinds of recreational activities around our life .For example,watching TV,singing,dancing ,playing chess,traveling,surfing on the Internet and so on.
There are many recreational activities in our life and it can make us so happy.People who always in work can take part in recreational activities to relax their self and people who stay at home all along can take part in it to enrich their life.But every coin has two sides,recreational activities is no exception and in another word ,it still has negative aspects.To begin with ,the students who take part in many recreational activities may effect their study.And in addition ,many people can't limit the times in play and it will reduce the times of rest.
For my part,we shouldn't work、study or stay at home all the way,we must take part in recreational activities to make our body relax,for example,we can invite our friends to travel on weekend,I think it is very interesting.But everything shouldn't do excessively,we must study to limit the play times.In a word,we should admit the advantages of recreational activities and also accept the disadvantages.