帮忙看看这篇文章有没有语法错误

帮忙看看这篇文章有没有语法错误
看看有没有用语不当或语法错误 我是初二的,所以不要改得太难哟!
Today,I tell you a true story about two beggars and me.One day,the beggars stopped me and asked me for money.The beggars are two old women with dirty hair,which smelled sourness and I must hold my my nose.They said with a poor voice:Oh,kind girl,Could you gave us some (a few) money we came from Sichuan and we have not ate anything for two days,just only two yuan for two pieces of bread.
I thought it maybe true,so I gave them two yuan.
But two weeks late,I walked on the same raod and stopped by the beggars again.They said in same poor voice:Oh,kind girl,Could you gave us some (a few) money we came from Sichuan and we have not ate anything for two days,just only two yuan for two pieces of bread.I surprised and said :Oh ,you asked money again from me
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