PLEASE HELP ME MODIFY MY composition,thank you very muchAs a chinese girl,I'm pround of the olympic hold in beijing.and I hope China will win the first.Even now i live in Holand,but everyday I watch TV,and everytime when I saw the Chinese win,I feel exciting.As a chinese girl,I'm pround of the Olympic Games is held in beijing.and I hope China will win the first.Even now I'm living in Holand,but everyday I watch TV,and everytime when I see the Chinese
PLEASE HELP ME MODIFY MY composition,thank you very much
As a chinese girl,I'm pround of the olympic hold in beijing.and I hope China will win the first.Even now i live in Holand,but everyday I watch TV,and everytime when I saw the Chinese win,I feel exciting.
As a chinese girl,I'm pround of the Olympic Games is held in beijing.and I hope China will win the first.Even now I'm living in Holand,but everyday I watch TV,and everytime when I see the Chinese win,I feel exciting.
ACCORDING TO回答者：十七点零九 - 见习魔法师 三级 ,I HAD CHANGED,IF HAVE ANOTHER ERROR I NEED CHANGE?
作为一个普通的中国女孩，我为2008年奥运会在北京举行感到无比的骄傲。我希望中国获得第一名。虽然我现在身在荷兰，但是每天我在电视里看到中国队夺得金牌,我都感到无比的兴奋！
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作为一个中国女孩，令我自豪的奥运在背景举行.我希望中国将赢得第一.现在我住在荷兰，但每天看电视，每次当我看到中国赢，我觉得令人兴奋的。
1 Olympic Games 正确写法
2 hold 要用被动
3 现在身在 进行时较好吧
4 最后一句的时态请统一