求英语达人帮忙修改语法 句子结构问题

求英语达人帮忙修改语法 句子结构问题
Healthy issues are association with the increasing population.One of them is the motor vehicles crashes.There is no doubt that the population continue to increase promoting to the development of driving,and more driving causes greater exposure to the dangers of the road,therefore,translating to the higher probability of a motor vehicles crash and pedestrian injuries even automobile fatalities (Frumkin,2002).For example,Frumkin reveals that motor vehicles cause approximately 6,000 fatalities and 110,000 injures among pedestrians nationwide.On the other hand,there is direct effect on healthy,specially the physical activity,during to the accelerated speed of population.Frumkin also states that overpopulation is association with less walking and bicycling and with more automobile travel in dense communities.And the sedentary lifestyle contributes to the greater possibility of overweight,which could be well-establishes risk factor for cardiovascular disease (overweight promotes the risk up to fourfold in the 30-44 age group,less at older ages),stroke,hypertension,obesity,even some cancers.Moreover,overweight people die at as much as 2.5 times the rate of non-obese people.
Regarding the effluence on environmental issues and healthy challenges,population explosion has results in the economic development.Samuel Sohldenobserves that increased population growth is a serious burden to generate sustained increases in per capita product.Both Paul and Anne Enrlich have reported that with in high population,resources must be limited,however,the developed nations (e.g.theNetherlands) have to consume more raw materials,especially the fossil fuels; to develop their own prosperity,therefore,they have to import natural resources from the developing nations which are struggling with the economic development.It seems the population in developing nations must benefit from exporting raw materials into rich nations; however,not only is it materialistic method to promote the economic development,it is also the insular mentality to develop for the long term,because the whole resources in earth are limited,they will be exhausted,and then,the developed nations should be more thriving,whilst the developing countries must be more impoverished,the gap between the rich and the poor must be widen,specifically,the gap in wealth between the richest 10 percentage of humanity and the poorest 10 percent have been greater in 2004 than 1994 (Paul R.& Stephen H.).