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Some people said the government shouldn’t put money on building theatres and sports stadiums; they should spend more money on medical and education. Agree or not agree?

I think the government should balance the budget and spend more money onto the recreational facilities’ investment such as building new theatres and sports stadiums.

There are two reasons to support my point of view. One is that the entertainment services like theatre ,stadium or game center etc, release people from high pressure daily work. This can reduce mentally problems of citizens in the modern society, which if handle with carelessness ,will also lead you to hospital. Second, entertainment service is a key part of the service industry and the service industry plays a more and more important role in the national economy. That means it will also support to build more medical and education facilities.

And contrarily, with the speedy development of economy, many basic facilities of modern society like hospital and school have already been built these years and many old hospital and school are also upgraded. They are good both in qualities and quantity.

In the word, it is time to shift the budget and resource to some other areas, which can drive the development of economy. And as the result, you will get more money to build a new school or a new hospital.