请高手来帮我改下英语作文.How to Cope with Stress
请高手来帮我改下英语作文.How to Cope with Stress
How to Cope with Stress
Now days the competition is immensely intense to the people who work in varied kinds of jobs.Every person has the stress.Such as the businessman who do business to make money.They often find which is the population like best and buy it on the low price then sell it on the high price.Staff members also have the stress.They will finish many assignments from the boss every week,and they have to work overtime to finish the assignment on time.The students suffer the pressure too.They usually keep up studying at night in order to be admitted the famous university.
Every person has the different methods to reduce the stress.Some guys reduce the pressure through the dancing.Others draw the pictures to diminish the stress.And also gardening is a good way to reduce the stress.
Such as the businessman who do (改为 does,因为 businessman 是单数第三人称）
buy it on the low price （改为 at low price)
sell it on the high price （改为 at high price)
be admitted （改为 be admitted to)
through the dancing.(删掉 the）
你的题目是如何应对压力,但2/3 的篇幅在谈论人们有什么压力,而不是如何应对.建议你多谈谈如何应对.