帮我看一下这篇初一的英语作文有什么问题

帮我看一下这篇初一的英语作文有什么问题
(1)
Swimming
Yearstoday was very hot .The temperature reach 39.7℃.I could stand it,so I went to a swimming pool with my friends---Ted,Mike and Jake.We all though swimming could us stay healthy.I loved swimming，because when I stayed in the water.I could feel cool.The day，I and my friends played water.I defeated Ted and Mike,bet Jake defeated me.
I thought played water was interesting and exerciting.We had fun in
the water!
(2)
total solar eclipse
July 22rd,2009 was a especial date.It had a total eclipse of the sun!This time the total eclipse of the sun is longest in a century.If you were in Hangzhou,you could see it,so many people went to the best place---Tianhuangping.I thought the total eclipse of the sun was very grand.I wanted to see it,but that day,I had a English lesson.I have to watch TV for saw it.
I fell sorry for myself.