Hello ,everyone I`m Li ,and am twenty five years old .I come from xxx and it have passed five years since I came to Shan
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Hello ,everyone I`m Li ,and am twenty five years old .I come from xxx and it have passed five years since I came to ShangHai .I am very glad to see everyone here .The things I`am fond of were so much ,including singing ,travel and sports and so on.Finally,I wish I could make an effort to do the best in the company .Thank you .
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the things i am fond ofare so many , including singing ,travelling ,doing sports and so on. 其它的都还可以.还有 说年龄时那个are 可以去掉,要么加个I
希望能采纳哪个are？ 对了 so much 我是打错了 是so many 。呵呵打错了，是am我发出后自己看一遍 发现笔误很多啊 还有 也不该写 were的 应该是are还有，把 前面的逗号去掉 这样也是可以的吧I`m Li and am twenty five years oldit has been five yearssince i came to shanghai