Hello ,everyone I`m Li ,and am twenty five years old .I come from xxx and it have passed five years since I came to ShangHai .I am very glad to see everyone here .The things I`am fond of were so much ,including singing ,travel and sports and so on.Finally,I wish I could make an effort to do the best in the company .Thank you .有错误么

Hello ,everyone I`m Li ,and am twenty five years old .I come from xxx and it have passed five years since I came to ShangHai .I am very glad to see everyone here .The things I`am fond of were so much ,including singing ,travel and sports and so on.Finally,I wish I could make an effort to do the best in the company .Thank you .
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