Hello everybodyI’m Jessica.Today,I’m already a Macau resident.But if 7 years ago,I did not choose here to study,what will I become.Have been working?Or became the wife of someone else’s.No one knows.So I think these choice is very important to me.I’d like to introduces myself to you by talking about why these choice is important.How I grew up influenced my choice and helped my career goal.When I was four,everyone said I’m clever.I knew the way how to

Hello everybody
I’m Jessica. Today, I’m already a Macau resident. But 7 years ago, I did not choose here to study, what would I become. Have been working? Or became the wife of someone else? No one knows.
So I think these choices are very important to me.
I’d like to introduce myself to you by talking about why these choices are important. How my growth influenced my choice and helped my career goal.
When I was four, everyone said I was clever. I knew the way how to went home by myself when I was lost. But because of this accident, my family still taught this thing. So that time, I am always full of confidence.
Seven years ago, my father had a decision, immigrated to Macau. That influenced my life. At that time, I was very reluctant. Even missed my hometown, and went back once a week for about 6 months, I was used to the life in Macau. Then the times returned home was less and less. And I also began to find my interest here.
I found that I was kind of interested in management. I did not like others. And interested in planning activities. In the secondary school, I always handled different types of function, which let me feel a sense of achievement.
So till now, I started to learn how to manage, how to be a person who can handle things around very well, how to be a successful person. I will cherish any chance in the life about my goal, although there is much more difficult. I will try to do the best.

But if 7 years ago（去掉if） Have been working? Or became the wife of someone else’s.（To work?Or become a wife of someone else’s） So I think these choice is very important to me.(these改this) I’d like to introduces myself to you by talking about why these choice is important.（ introduces 去s,these改this） everyone said I’m clever(I'm改I was) I knew the way how to went home in myself when I lost. (I knew the way how to go home by myself when I was lost. ) my family still taught this thing(my family still tell about this thing) I always full of confidence.(加was) my father had a decision, immigrated to Macau.(immigrated改immigrating）

第一行 did 换成 would
these choice is these 是复数吧 后面是is 明显有问题
to introduces ??? 我不懂 是你打错了 还是原句有问题 to 后面只能是原型
these choice is 跟上面的问题一样

Hello everybody，
I’m Jessica. Today, I’m already a Macau resident. If I did not choose to study here before 7 years , Maybe i Have been working for someone Or became the wife of someone else’s. No one knows.
I think these choice is very important to me. I'd like to introduces myself to you by talking about why these choice is important for me. How I grew up and what influenced my choice and helped my career goal.
When I was four, everyone said I was clever. I knew the way to go back home by myself when i got lost. By this accident, i became very confidence.
Seven years ago, my father had a decision, immigrated to Macau. That influenced my life. At that time, I was very reluctant. I missed my hometown very much.After 6 months , I adapted to the life of Macau. I began to find my interest over here.
I found i was interested in management. such as planning activities. In the secondary school, i always handle different types of function,It makes me feel success.
now, I start to learn how to manage, how to be a good handler, how to be a successful person. If I have a chance about my goal in the futhur . I will try my best ,whatever how hard it will be.

Hello everybody
I’m Jessica. Now , I’m a Macau resident. But if 7 years ago, I did not choose this. what will I become. To work? Or become the wife of someone else’s. No one knows.
So I think the choice is very important to me.
I’d like to tell you why these choice is important. How I grew up influenced my choice and helped my career goal.
When I was four, everyone said I was clever. I knew the way how to go home in myself when I lost. But because of this accident, my family still told this thing. So in that time, I was always full of confidence.
Seven years ago, my father make a decision, immigrating to Macau. That influenced my life. At that time, I was very reluctant. I missed my hometown so I went back one time every week . Maintaining about 6 months, I started to have a life in Macau. Reduced the number of back. I also find my interest here.
I found I had some interested in management and planning activitiesnd . I did not like other manager. In the secondary school,I always handle different types of function, it feel a sense of accomplishment.
So in now, I started to learn how to manage, how to be a handler, how to be a successful people. If I have chance in the life about my goal. Although there is much more difficult. I will try to do the best.

what will I become改为 what I would be

Hello everybody
I’m Jessica. Today, I’m already a Macau resident. But if I didn't choose to study here, I might work or marry someone in my hometown. Who knows.
So I think this choice is very important to me.
I’d like to introduce myself to you by telling the reason why this choice is important to me and the way how it influences my life and helps me to reach my career goal.
When I was four, everyone said I was clever. I could go back home by myself when I was lost. After that experience, My famliy often talked about it in front of me or others and I have become full of confidence from that time.
Seven years ago, my father made a decision to immigrate to Macau. That influenced my life. At that time, I was very reluctant. I even went back home once a week due to I missed my hometown so much.At last, I got used to the life in Macau after 6 months here.As a result I decreased my time to go back home gradually and began to find my interests here.
I find myself have interest in management.In addition to it, I also have an interest in organizing ativities. In secondary school, I always took different types of duty. It made me feel the sense of accomplishment.
I have started to learn how to manage, how to be a manager and how to be a successful person. If I have any chance to reach my goal,I will try my best to get it no matter how difficult it is .

Hello everybody
I’m Jessica. Today, I’m already a Macau resident. If I didn't choose to study here before 7 years,What would I become? Maybe I would work or become someone's wife if I still stayed in China( China地方你可以自己改，someone else's 已经是某人的，不用再加of，而且，一般讲人的，都是加's。这两个句式是if-clause的假设句，因为你不能从回七年前。) No one knows.
I think this(这个是单数，复数才是用these) choice is very important to me.
I’d like to introduce（to 后面要加动词原形，不用加s） myself to you by talking about why this(单数) choice is important. Do you know how this choice influenced my growth and the goal of my career?(演讲稿吧？用问句会比较有互动)
When I was a four-year-old girl(这样说比较完整), everyone said I was(要用过去式)clever. I knew the way to go back home by myself when I got lose. My family praised me to the skies(家人对我赞叹不已） because of this accident.So I was(要加个动词) always full of confidence at that time.
Seven years ago, my father had a decision which was our family immigrating to Macau. (改成-ing,不过，immigrate是指从外国移居回来，而emigrate是指移居去外国，两个又分别的哦。用which 连接会比较连贯。) That influenced my life. At that time, I was very reluctant. I missed my hometown very much and went back per week in the beginning 6 months untill I adapted to the life of Macau and found my interest here. (用until就是之前很想家乡，直到后来怎样，有个转变。)
I found I was interested in management but just in planning activities.(只对planning activities有兴趣。) In the secondary school, we always need to handle different types of function so we can feel a sense of accomplishment. （不是很懂这句想讲什么，不过少了subject）
So in now, I started to learn how to manage, how to be a handler and(要加个and 把三个连接起来) how to be a successful people. If I have a chance (chance是可数的，所以一定要加a或者加s)in the life about my goal in the future,I will try my best no matter how difficult it will be.
做了下proofreading，哈哈，其实我英文也不好，练习练习，你看看有什么问题么？