帮我看看这句英文有语法错误么?Can I say to you?I wish to give you the joyful songs and sweet cake.I wish all the happiness in this earth will make you a skining star!另外帮忙改改 通顺点
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帮我看看这句英文有语法错误么?
Can I say to you?I wish to give you the joyful songs and sweet cake.I wish all the happiness in this earth will make you a skining star!
另外帮忙改改 通顺点
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sweet cake,cake是可数名词，应该加a或是加s.wish可以改为hope,其它的我看不懂
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may I talk to you?I wish to give you some joyful songs and a sweet cake.I wish all the happiness in this earth will make you be a shining star!