谁能帮我修改一下这篇英语演讲稿!

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谁能帮我修改一下这篇英语演讲稿!
Good afternoon,everyone!today,I am pleased to be able to stand here and give you a short speech.The topic of my speech is “my travel”.I hope you will like it.
Most people like to travel,because travel can relax.When I travel,I can enjoy the mountain,river,sky,animals.They are beautiful,but also to make my own mind to become better.
Do you want to make friendly people?Do you want to close this nature?Do you want to become more outgoing?Go for a travel with your family or your friends,you will have a great time.
You can travel by car,bus sightseeing,you can walk,you can take a lot of photos,visit many places of interest.Look,it is interesting how ah!
Thank you very much!
再帮我添加几句,然后一些语法错误改一下,最好有激情一点.最好能再长一点.
别怪我要求太多,

Good afternoon,everyone!today,I am pleased to be able to stand here and give you a short speech.The topic of my speech is “my travel”.I hope you will like it.
Most people like to travel,because travel can relax themselves.When I travel,I can enjoy the mountains,rivers,sky,animals.They are beautiful and they make my own mind become better.During the travel,I can see the different custom in defferent places,eat different food,and enjoy the different lives.Travel develop myself in body and in mind.
You can travel by car or bus sightseeing.you can walk.you can take a lot of photos.you can visit many places of interest.Look,it is interesting how ah!
Do you want to make friendly people?Do you want to close this nature?Do you want to be more outgoing?Go for a travel with your family or your friends,you will have a great time.
Thank you very much!
PS.我英语六级,离初二很远了,实在不清楚现在初二的孩子英语到底处于什么样的水平,所以不敢改多了.英语演讲重在表现自己的过程,内容怎样其实无所谓的.加油哦!