求高手给我点评一下英语作文（两个首段）
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求高手给我点评一下英语作文（两个首段）
Recently,we often hear that many college students have mental problems.It is common that mental health played an important role in students’ daily life.It caused a hot discussion in how to improve students’ mental health.
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With the development of social and technology,e-books are more and more popular in people’s daily life.We can reading by e-books almost everywhere at any time because e-books can designed in mp3,mp4,mobilephone and the like.
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这2段写的很好,也用了很多亮点加分词汇,像定语从句,还有发挥了重要的作用（play an important part）等等、不过给点小建议：第一段的第一句,we often hear that （我们经常听说）,这句有一点中国式英语.可以尝试修改...