请帮我改一下英语作文
请帮我改一下英语作文
Domestic violence is a social negative phenomena in recent years,more concern for the community.Some people insist that this problem should be stop and solved effectively.Others regard that it as a exaggerated incident.On the whole,domestic violence does a great harm to family,it influence on the development of children and them life especially.
there are many kinds of domestic violences which include physical abuse,sexual abuse,psychological abuse,and abuse to property and pets (Ganley,1989).No matter what kind of those all have a serious impact on the children's physical and psychological health.The families which often happen domestic violences can easily make children world-weariness,fear and anxiety especially if the person do violence on children directly.Sometimes,children may feel inferior,loneliness because the family violence influence on the development of them and their life.However,sometimes if children cannot bear domestic violence they may walk out of their home and never return,waste their studies,even drive them to commit crimes.Parents are the first teacher for people,children will pay attention to the words and deeds of their parents when they were born.So when they seen it they will study and lead them psychological imbalance meanwhile they want to do this in others.Therefore they get violent
domestic violence is a big problem people can not overlook.government and the victims should play a very important role in solv
Domestic violence is a social negative phenomena in recent years,more concerning for the community.
Some people insist that this problem should be stopped and solved effectively.
Others regard it as an exaggerated incident.(这句没有语病但是不清楚你想说啥所以没动)
Generally,domestic violence does a great harm to family,especially as it influences the growth and life of the children.
There are many kinds of domestic violences which include physical abuse,sexual abuse,psychological abuse,and abuse of property and pets (Ganley,1989).
No matter what kind of the abuses are,they all have serious and negative affects on the children's physical and psychological health.
Those families with more often domestic violences will easily make the children pessimistic,afriad and anxious especially if the harm is directly conducted to the children.
Sometimes,children may feel self-abased(我猜你是想表达自卑的意思.),lonely because the family violence influences their childhood and even their life.
Additionally,if children cannot bear domestic violence they may escape from their families,waste their studies,or even worse——the domestic violence may drive them to commit crimes.
Parents are the first teachers for their children,and children will remember every word and behavior of their parents when they are growing up.
So when they see those negative behaviors every day they will imitate and be led by psychological imbalance so that they probably will want to do this to others.
As a result,they become violent.
Domestic violence is a big problem which people can not ignore.
The government and the victims should play a very important role in finding the solution to this severe problem.
看你全部手打上来也不容易.自己对照吧.我每句话都换行了的.本来弄了红字想让你看清楚点坑爹的度娘也不让.诶.
改了这么久这么细致不容易~首段的那个不明确的地方我想表达的是 有的人认为人们把家暴夸张化了，所以不重视抱歉刚刚好困。。The others' opinion is that domestic violence is exageratted so that there's no need to concern too much on it.