一段英语短文的语法.
问题描述：
一段英语短文的语法.
我写的一段短文,帮我看下是否有语法错误或者意思表达不恰当,I asked boss for a rise the other day.I told him in this city cost of living was very high.I said I had to support wife and family's cost,but they couldn't live on my salary.Then boss told me business was very bad.But to my surprise,in the end,he agreed and offered me a big rise in salary.
答
I asked （my）boss for a rise（raise涨工资） the other day.I told him in this city cost（cost 改为the expense） of living was very high.I said I had to support wife and family's cost（去掉撇号s 和cost,改为wife and family）,but they couldn't live on my salary.Then（my） boss told me business was very bad.But to my surprise,in the end,he agreed and offered me a big rise（raise） in salary.