英语自我介绍请帮忙修改My name is Ma Hong Lei..And it’s now a high school student.In the study,the best math score,score the worst chemicals.There are four people in my family ,my father,my mother,my brother and I.My hobby is to read the novel,Internet and shopping.Among them,the novel is my watch every day to do things.Now my biggest ambition is to have English test four,and at graduate schools.

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英语自我介绍请帮忙修改
My name is Ma Hong Lei..And it’s now a high school student.In the study,the best math score,score the worst chemicals.
There are four people in my family ,my father,my mother,my brother and I.
My hobby is to read the novel,Internet and shopping.Among them,the novel is my watch every day to do things.
Now my biggest ambition is to have English test four,and at graduate schools.

My name is Ma Hong Lei. I am now a high school student. Among my subjects, i am best at math, but worst at chemistry.
There are four members in my family, my father, my mother, my brother, and me.
My hobbies include reading novels, surfing the internet and shopping.Out of my hobbies, i find reading most favorable, i read everyday.
Now, my goal is to pass grade four english and graduate from my school.

我给你点意见,里面还可以加点这样的语气句子,显得稍微有意思点,
如下:
but I also got a English name XXX(但我也有英文名叫什么比如凯蒂),
so you can call me Kitty for short(所以你也可以简单得就叫我凯蒂啦).
like listening to the music and XX is my favorite star/band.(我喜欢听音乐,最喜欢叉叉歌手或乐队)
And I have a dream that one day I'll have a chance to share my singings.
So remember me!Remember my name!I'm XXX.Thank you!