我写了一篇英语作文,The moment I was praised by my motherAt home,my mother always praises me.When I finished homework,my mother praised me.She said,‘You're a love learning’s good boy.’When I finished,I washed dishes and my mother praised me.She said,‘You're a love working's good boy.’Hear the sound of praise,I was happy.At that moment,I thought,my mother worked hard and she was tired.Therefore,I have to study hard and return to her.Thank you,mother.

嗯，写得不错，没有什么可以修改的。

呃……你这个第一句是个一般现在时，而且有个一般现在时的“always”，你后面那几个“When”啥啥啥的就应该用一般现在时。整个作文的时态给老师一种很奇怪的感觉。想要不大改，第一句最好删掉。改成别的。
还有那个“love learning’s good boy”，非常不专业，倒不如写成struggling（努力的）孩子，还有“’Hear the sound of praise，I was happy”重大语法错误！一个句子两个动词，一个皇上能有两个皇后吗？改成hearing.
感情表达不够强烈。比如在“mother”前面加上个“my dear”，这样不是更好？

The moment I was praised by my motherMy mother is the best person in my eyes.When I finished homework,my mother praised me.She said,‘You're a struggling boy.’After finished,I washed dishes and my mo...

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