修改这几句英语★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★以下是我某门课的期末总结报告(包括给自己打分,和叙述理由等),看有什么错误用法什么的Hi,Professor xxxxx.I am xxxx,from China.I am a student of the Department of Business Administration,xxx University.Before attending your class,my understanding of emerging technologies and future business was somewhat limited to robots and e-business.But after attending your class,I realized that everything has to do with human being.Just as you said,we can always learn from robots,but

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修改这几句英语★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★
以下是我某门课的期末总结报告(包括给自己打分,和叙述理由等),看有什么错误用法什么的
Hi,Professor xxxxx.I am xxxx,from China.I am a student of the Department of Business Administration,xxx University.
Before attending your class,my understanding of emerging technologies and future business was somewhat limited to robots and e-business.But after attending your class,I realized that everything has to do with human being.Just as you said,we can always learn from robots,but we seldom have the chance to sit down with our friends from all over the world,and learn from each other.(Something we call team work).I feel that this course offered us such an opportunity.The classroom was like a miniature world.It helped me better understand different countries,and have a better understanding of the people in the those countries.
In the last few years I spent too much time to learn Korean.Therefore,I had less time for English study.As a result,my English suffered.This somewhat affected my participation in your class.Now,I feel that my Korean is pretty good,and is time to catch up with my English.For my self evaluation,(absolute evaluation,not relative comparison),I would give my self a B,the reasons being:
1.From the very first day to the last day,I’ve never missed a single meeting.
2.I paid absolute attention to listen to your lecture.
3.I am very competitive.I am tri-lingual (Chinese,Korean and English).
I have good knowledge of computer technology,and I am a good website
editor.I have a website of my own:xxx.xxx.xxxx.
Most importantly,from your course,I benefited tremendously:
1.I have a better understanding of the global view.
2.I ‘ve made many friends from different countries.
3.To a certain degree,my English is improved.
4.I have a better understanding of people's ideology in a global setting,which helps me better communicate with people in a global setting.
5.From my classmates’ presentations,I learned more about some emerging technologies.
I plan to take part in the next summer semester.In the mean time,I will try my best to improve my English,so that I will participate even more in the class.

But after your class, I realized that everything has something to do with human beings?这句没能理解你的想法。“have sth. to do with”是“与。。有关的意思”,something不可以省略的。
It helped me have a better understanding of different countries and the people there.或者It helped me know more about different countries and have a better understanding of the people there.比较简洁,避免重复。
In last few years,I have spent so much time learning Korean so that I had little time for English.(spend time on sth./in doing sth.)
It is time to improve my English.(catch up with sb.)
the reasons are as follows:(不知道你的句式是否正确,看着很别扭,这个比较稳妥)
I never missed a single meeting(也许是class?不知道你的情况是怎样)
I paid absolute attention to listening to your lecture. (pay attention to doing sth.)
I have a good knowledge of...
最后一部分注意时态对应,benefited——had a better understanding of...第三点最好放在最后,有总结意味。
summer semester?斟酌一下想表达的什么含义。
so that是“以至于”的意思,似乎不通顺,我猜想,是想表达I will try my best to improve my English, be more active in class.
替换一下文章中出现的过多的have a better understanding of吧,即使只是用learn more about这种简单的词组,也比都是一样的看起来舒服。
能力有限,只能改到这种程度了,基本没什么打的错误了,像文章开头涉及的专业知识,我不大明白,所以没有改动。希望对你有所帮助。^ ^

Hi,Professor xxxxx.This is xxxx,a student of the Department of Business Administration,xxx University,China.Before attending your class,my understanding of emerging technologies and future business wa...