马上考研了 几句英语作文批改纠错 总觉得第一句话有点怪怪的 帮我看看吧

马上考研了 几句英语作文批改纠错 总觉得第一句话有点怪怪的 帮我看看吧
Briefly and vividly,as is shown above,a lot of people,without any smile on their face,are playing computer games in smallcells.What's more,there is a notion under the drawing,which means:the near and far of the Internet.At first sight,this may seem a common cartoon,but careful weighing on second mind,no better picture can illustrate the badeffect of the Internet.